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Il commento di Alan Summer al mio haiku “Misty morning”, da “Inner Voice”, il blog di Jennifer Hambrick   Leave a comment

 

 

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Wonderful!

I was reminded that the sea, and especially holiday places such as seaside resorts, beaches etc… are so vital, especially with our parents when they were both children, and then as young parents.

Also reminded of this haiku, although quite different, both Eufemia’s haiku and that of Lynne Rees struck a chord with me:

2nd With Words International Online Haiku Competition (2009)
Joint 2nd Prize

the sound of the sea
speaking to my mother
on her birthday

Lynne Rees (b. Wales)
Antibes, France

http://www.withwords.org.uk/results.html#2009commentary

re:

misty morning
mother doesn’t remember
the colour of the sea

Eufemia, the alliteration in your first two lines works magically with the diminishing power of memory as we get older: misty; morning; re[m]ember added to the hard assonance of ‘c’ in colour and the soft s of ‘sea’. So much to say in this beautifully crafted haiku. 🙂

warm regards,

Alan

Alan Summers is  President of the United Haiku and Tanka Society; a Japan Times award-winning writer; Pushcart Prize nominated poet; also co-founder of Call of the Page which promotes literacy and literature events.

His blog are:

http://area17.blogspot.it/

http://www.withwords.org.uk/index.html

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